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Thoughts of an unsure man by ~A-Guy:iconA-Guy:



As a child I’m sure I thought,
Of all the things that I’d be taught.
How I’d grow up and live my life,
And one day maybe take a wife.

The futures bright, the futures gold,
Won't it be grand once I’ve grown old.

And as I grew I stayed the course,
Life would be great, I’d have no remorse.
Then I grew up quick and I grew up hard,
There are thing in life that you must discard.

The futures bright, the futures gold,
Won't it be grand once I’ve grown old.

But now I’m here apparently,
Though I feel the same, am I still me?
I’ve walked a path, a child’s hopes and dreams,
Now at journeys end or so it seems.

The futures bright, the futures gold,
Won't it be grand once I’ve grown old.

And all about me I can here the cry,
Get of your arse, you’re so work-shy.
So what of me, what am I to do,
Live my life, or live just like you?

The futures bright, the futures gold,
Won't it be grand once I’ve grown old.

I sit and think, my minds ablaze,
What of my life, it’s all a haze.
And then as I sit here all tired and weary,
A thought arises that’s not so cheery.

Is the future bright?  Is the future gold?
Perhaps it’s not so grand now I’ve grown old.
©2005-2009 ~A-Guy
:icona-guy:

Author's Comments

Something I wrote after I'd been dwelling on a discussion I'd had with my mother. Writing like this isn't my normal style, but I found with not much thought the words seemed to appear in my mind.


I might try and make an audio copy for fun later depending on how bored I get.

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:iconinmyroom:
i like this, you have a good way of getting across what you feel. its a great concept, something different to most things around here, well done.
:icona-guy:
Thanks, your compliment is very appreciated. Especially as I always forget that other people occasioanlly look through my page :D
:iconretrozombie:
The way this is written, you come across as much older than 23 (is that your real age? ;)) But taken from the perspective of someone nearing the end, it's very powerful. I like to think I'm only half way there, and this piece reminds me to take advantage of what I have left!
Good stuff!
:icona-guy:
Definatly 23 unless this isn't 2005... :S And I'm glad you liked the piece.


Thanks
:icona-guy:
Definatly 23 unless this isn't 2005... :S And I'm glad you liked the piece.


Thanks
:icona-guy:
Me? Accidentally reply twice? Never. Must be that evil twin of mine...
:iconfrancees:
interesting... it is good structure and writing style, but possibly you could add more description of emotion and such. good stuff :) if you could take a look at my newest poem, Wide Eyed, it would be hugely appriciated

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skinfidelity
:iconbrebear:
So you send me over here, with the weird thought that possibly you had written something else since what I had already read this morning. And all I find is just more comments on what I had read, so let me comment on this then.

First off, Andy, you are not old.

Secondly: from what I read, life back at home isnt being the niceset to you right now.. sucky.

And thirdly... I am putting my request in for the audio copy whenever you decide if you want to make that up or not

Oh and as for comments about the writing itself lets see here.. its appealing factor is that its simple, and yet you express so much. You took the form that we all learned as children and made it into your own outlet without ruining the very simplistic childlike nature or it all, very cool.

And that be all I gots to say about that

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My stool is stable ... unless I do stuff on it
:icona-guy:
Well I needed something to distract you whilst I made my escape to bed.:meditate:

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